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I like your sentence his loving heart dying suddenly, because it references back to the back of how he wished to have a different drop from his uncle fred but sadly got forced to work in the brunner mines
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Nikkita I like your sentences, I think that you should use capital letter to start your sentences
ReplyDeleteI think that you could use the thesaurus to make your words more interesting like instead of bright you could use shimmering or dazzling.
ReplyDeleteI like your sentence his loving heart dying suddenly, because it references back to the back of how he wished to have a different drop from his uncle fred but sadly got forced to work in the brunner mines
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